Review Hey Priyanka Kamath @Priyanka Kamath
This piece is raw, deeply personal, and almost reads like an unfiltered diary entry poured into poetic lines. It captures the theme of Beneath the Mask perfectly revealing the contrast between what the world sees and what the self quietly battles. Unlike purely metaphorical takes, this one is introspective, vulnerable, and unafraid to show imperfections.
Strengths:
The honesty here is striking. Lines like “I wear mask of confident tone / Within me I am afraid and alone” and “Why do I have PhD in taking tension?” show the mix of pain and self-awareness with a touch of relatability and humor.
The structure mirrors a stream of consciousness, making it feel authentic and personal rather than overly polished. That rawness itself is a strength.
The mention of losing her parents adds emotional depth—it feels like we are not just reading poetry but entering her lived reality.
The ending is hopeful: “Writing in flow helps me pull off my mask and have clarity of thought!!!” closes the circle beautifully, showing poetry as her act of unmasking.
This poem connects because it doesn’t try to be ornamental—it’s a mirror of lived contradictions: confidence vs. insecurity, joy vs. anxiety, strength vs. fragility. Readers will see themselves in her confessions of sensitivity, the struggle to “let go,” and the tension between how we’re perceived and who we really are. It’s healing to read because it says aloud what many keep buried.
Suggestions:
The piece is quite long; trimming some repetitive sections could sharpen its punch without losing honesty. For example, some lines about habits/tension could be merged to tighten the flow.
A few metaphors could be added for imagery (like the “PhD in taking tension” line, which is brilliant). More of these would elevate the craft while keeping the rawness intact.
The poem sometimes shifts between rhyme and free verse choosing one direction consistently might make it smoother to read.
As I ponder over my trait
I find myself either dull or bright
The best swings one can witness is my mood
At times I am physically present but mentally in different world
As growing up I was a silent child
After few years I found myself talkative
However easily hurt and overly sensitive
I am considered as a gentle giant
Who appears huge but has soft trait
I wear mask of confident tone
Within me I am afraid and alone
At times I tend validation than believing in my ability
People have misused my vulnerability
The most energy draining task is falling in loop belt
Building habit is easy but maintaining it is difficult
The moment bad habit in me triggers to core
I need to learn the consequence and divert my mind more
The most underrated quality is self talk
And may be some meditation or going for a walk
I appear very jovial and carefree ,Pious
I wonder if it's actually me or I am just pretentious
At times I am tagged to be selfish and mean
Because I am seldom in touch with anyone keen
But it's just because I have my own business to mind
Also I am in journey to understand myself and find
I need to know why do I cry without reason
Why do I have PhD in taking tension ?
Why letting go isn't easy ?
Mind diversion is only through being busy
I realise I have so much scope of improvement with each introspection
Although I try my best but I am a model of imperfection
My parents are no more and I miss them very much
Life isn't fair and bound to face unfortunate situation such
But what matters is how I lead my life
To make them proud and walk another mile
When life gives lemon , I should learn to make lemonade
Only then I will be relevant and never fade
The mask I wear of a beautiful smile on face
Is something I need to tattoo permanently with each phase
I am Fortunate and grateful to have blessings I met
All I need to work on is to have a positive mindset
Poetry writing style of mine is not the conventional one that's taught
But Writing in flow helps me pull off my mask and have clarity of thought!
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©️ Priyanka Kamath
10 June 2025
Woow❤️
A deeply introspective and moving piece of creativity bravely peeled back layers to reveal the complex interplay between your outward demeanor and inner struggles. Good word flows well, and use of power of imagination effectively conveys your emotional landscape.
A remarkably honest and relatable poem captured the experience of wearing different “masks” and navigating the often-conflicting aspects of one’s personality. Your vulnerability in exploring themes of self-doubt, sensitivity, and the search for inner peace is truly commendable and makes this piece very powerful❤️
Keep exploring these profound insights through your writing❤️
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